Friday, November 4, 2011

8:00 pm

Click, click, click her heels tap out a staccato rhythm as she crosses the foyer and heads for the stairs. She arrives at her door, the hall is so quiet all, her neighbors home for hours already have settled into their evening routines. The smells of their dinners already finished waft through the hall. Walking through her door she notices the stark contrast her own house holds from the public space of the hall. It’s dark, almost cold, immaculate and organized but something is missing. She drops the mail in the recycling bin by the door and hangs her coat and bag on their respective hooks. Everything in its place, a place for everything. This is the life she wanted. A success in her field, she does not struggle or want for anything, surrounded by beautiful things, her life is in neat and tidy order. She collapses into the supple leather chair kicking of her shoes and crumbling into a pile of unexpected emotion. How can a life that seems so full be so empty?



Finally jumping in instead of lurking with:
Write On Edge: Red-Writing-Hood

7 comments:

Polish Mama on the Prairie said...

Love that! Beautiful. It really painted a picture for me. And it reminds me to be thankful for being a Mama.

jesterqueen.com said...

I like how this post and the five minute Friday work together. I'm like you - I never imagined my life like this. I was going to be a writer, and that was most important. And quite honestly, I still hurt for having to defer and defer and defer that dream. But it's coming. I'm slowly finding that I can have professional and personal fulfillment. And oh yes, my life would be so empy without my kids.

idiosyncraticeye said...

That was a great picture that you painted, I felt it was the beginning of something bigger and would love to find out more. :)

The Anecdotal Baby said...

Stopping by from WOE... beautiful writing and imagery.

jenny said...

Nicely done! I love seeing the "grass is always greener" aspect to this post since most days I'm swearing at my kid-generated clutter and chaos under my breath. Good reminder to be more grateful! Definitely would like to see more of the character.

Venus said...

Really great use of juxtaposition! I like that in the end, what isn't tidy is *her*.

Galit Breen said...

Oh my, love! I absolutely adore the contrast of getting what we want and then realizing it's not quite right!

So very relatable, and so well portrayed here!

Also? Welcome! I'm so very glad that you wrote this week!!

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